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When The Music Is Over won the 
weekly prompt contest for the week ending July 18th 2010. The prompt for the week was Lost Love.
My thanks to the following for the wonderful stock 
& 
background 
model 
sheet music
love 22
22
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joy 2
2
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wow 3
3
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mad 0
0
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sad 1
1
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fear 0
0
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neutral 0
0
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I'm glad you like them 
The text choice, however, was a bit daunting at first. It took me a couple of minutes of hit-and-miss before I was able to read the piece without messing up the words. Also, the text color, while beautiful with the background, makes the piece a bit difficult to read in the middle where the sky has lightened—the colors are almost exactly the same, making the text blend in with the background image.
I also felt, at some points in the poem, that the rhythm was being thrown off-balance. Not all of your stanzas follow the same rhythm exactly, but instead change, ever so slightly, from line to line, and that made keeping one specific pace rather difficult for me as I was reading. It feels almost like a staccato piece—whereas the first and last stanzas flow so beautifully, the rest comes out in an almost disjointed fashion.
But I LOVELOVELOVE the poem in compilation with the background image. I think you portrayed the emotions of the violin superbly, through the word choices you made as well as the darkness of the sky and background. Over all, this piece is wonderfully well-done. Excellent job!
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